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Hello.I'm just wondering if I can write a fair story.Well,I will be describing my lamp.Oh,and by the way I am 10 years old,female,and in the 5th grade.It is said I write well from my teacher,so I wanted to ask other people.Please,no rude comments,I don't appreciate it,honestly,who does??
Please remember,I wrote this ALL by myself.

Lamp:
The white cord,snaked around the bottom of the lamp,connecting to the wall.It's skinny body usually cold from to the touch,due to the metal it's made of.The monkey plush,dangling from the middle,as if holding on for its dear life.The pink paint,peeling and making the white paint,it used to be,visible.The lamp shade white as cotten,circling the bulb,shielding the user from such a bright instense shine.The fairly small object keeping the lamp shade in place,sticking out from the top,like a little kid,peeking out,into a strange world.


Well,how was it??:]

Oops,my bad,I was just like..to excited to post it :o..My bad the question is"Do I write well?":o
Uhm..and thankies ^-^

Well done, very well done. Watch your use of punctuation (the commas). As general rule take a breath and then read the sentence. If you run out of breath before the end of the sentence then it's probably too long. Use one comma to extend the sentence if it's really important and you need to keep the information together.

One breath, one sentence.

Again, well done.

You write very well, especially for a ten-year-old.

judging by your first four words, not at all..

but since you're only 10, your description of a lamp is pretty good.

I think your writeing is excellent,keep up the great work and please let me know when you write you first book.
Good luck

That was REALLY GOOD! Especially from a ten year old. I started writing like that when I was about 13. The best way you can improve you writing is to add spaces after commas/periods.

Also you might want to elaborate what is being explained in your writing. By the way, your question should be "Do I write well".

why would you want to write about a lamp?

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